Monday, May 5, 2008

This is a poem that Blair made fun of today, which I thought was quite amusing. Anyway:

Deer dart past
Limbs strenthend with spring.
Birds call overhead
Free, filled with song
That bursts unchecked
As the sun spreads it's golden blanket
Of light and warmth
On the soft folds of green.

This is my first attempt at a scenery poem. Cut me some slack ; - )

2 comments:

Brass Baboon said...

Iv'e seen (and written much much worse. It's not bad.

If you swapped the first 2 lines for the second 2 you have a bit of a 4 line wriming scheme which isn't too bad. will take a bit of regiggering of the 5th line though...

Scratch said...

Ill think it through. Ta.